literature

The violence of healing

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Turbid blood begins to flitter.
Free it from the narrow
            vessels. Let it scatter
                      like sparrows.
Let them flit, let them twitter,
          shatter
      all the chimeras in whose talons they squeak.


Reach into my mouldering chest,
  run a claw
        down  my ribs,
            rip
          the ribbons of rust from its cage.
Blow the bud
       of my heartbeat to blossom,
         to erupt with the power of rage.


Brush the dust off my hair to glitter.
Bluster it into a gale.
Shred
     the frail cobwebs and eight-legged critters
           lying cocooned in their nests.
Let them protest,
       distressed
     like blind fish trapped in a brail.


Embers smoulder behind dusty crust.
Eyelashes turn into coal
          and disperse.
Thrust
   the fiery spears of comets
        into my pupils and watch
             as my eyeballs combust,
                     no longer immersed
                         in the static.
Let seaweed of fire, erratic,
            fumble with my flaking skin.


I burn
       in a blazing reminder
            of how to be fully awake.
This is a poem I've been working on and off for... hmm, 6-7 years? Not all the time, of course! :D 
Each verse (except the last) signifies a failed relationship to me, because it was written after that phase of paralytic momentum that comes after a break-up, when you finally start feeling alive and normal again. And the last one was just me thinking to myself: "I need to finish this thing already." After all, unfinished poems are like ghosts - they haunt you and whisper to you at most inappropriate moments and don't let go until you've set them to peace.

It would be great if you could tell me what kind of awakening you associated it with while reading. 

Also any critical feedback is welcome. I'm particularly interested if it flows well, if the rhymes sound natural or too forced, if you can picture the images well enough in your mind, if the ending felt anti-climactic to you, whether you think typographic devices would fit the poem and if there is a tangible difference in tone and style between each verse (given the large periods of time between the writing of each one).
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ariya-sacca's avatar
This is beautiful!